Tuesday 31 July 2012
Awesome Imaginations! Creative Writing
We've started to spend some quality time on our creative writing this term with a focus for the first couple of weeks of being more descriptive in our writing. Stories will be written individually, in pairs and in groups. Examples of what the kids have been doing can be found below. Check it out and give some feedback!
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"BOOM, CRASH" My blood rushes through me. I'm all alone on a street and all the cars are crashed... "HELP" I heard. Then I saw a girl running towards me. “Help, help me” said the girl “what’s wrong?” I asked “My mum I lost her” she replied “there’s a tsunami coming” I said “I know we have to find my mum please” she said in a cute voice “alright well lets go find your mum.” I replied.
ReplyDeleteNot finshed yet.
Sirens started to wail and shattered the silence the night had once held...
ReplyDeleteArrhgg get down!!! "mum where are you" Casey darling come down here to the lounge. Mum the door is jammned casey cries. CASEYYYYYYYYYYYYY i'm coming. come on now we have to go no i have to find pillfy (teddy)forget it come now i found it hurry up peter come come now have you got the key for the shelter pineapple its still in the kitchen oh ill go get it MUM whats happenin theres a airade bombs coming down on us Casey lets go What a selter, a bomb shelter keeps bombs from killing us.
ReplyDeleteAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
Casey shut up SHUT UP
Maaaa are we safe now
As soon as I heard the air raid alarm wail through my head my heart almost stopped beating. I thought that this only happened in computer games, movies and during the Second World War. I thought that New Zealand would never get bombed. I then screamed “mum” at the top of my lungs. My mothers pale face soon hurried into my room. “We...h-have to go down to the sh-shelter” stammered my mother. We hurriedly ran down the stairs and out of our pearl-white house. We were greeted with a scene of utter chaos. People were running round in circles. I started sprinting towards our emergency bunker. It was then I looked up to see the ever growing black nuke hurtle towards earth. That was the last thing I ever saw.
ReplyDeleteA loud wailing noise was blaring into everyone's ears creating a wave of panic across the town. People are running down the street shounting "Air - raids"!!! Parents run for their children screaming out their names. A rush of people sprint down the road and almost knock me over as they try to find cover. The sirens are continually wailing as some randon person grabs my arm and starts to run down the road.
ReplyDeleteA large, old plane comes flying overhead.
That's when the explosions start.
I rush towards my house, almost fainting from both exhaustion and fear. The massive horde of zombies slowly approaches, covering the street like a giant wave of walking corpses. I collapse at the front door step, desperately trying to get up, but my body won’t let me. The zombies are drooling over me, leaning over me as I spot two Uzi’s (an Uzi is a sub-machine gun) in front of me. A rush of hope runs through me as I pick the two guns up in my hands and leap up onto my feet.
ReplyDeleteI say “Bring it, b****s!” and aim the guns at the two closest maggot-infested heads and pull the trigger. There are no bullets…
DUN DUN DUN
As I'm walking down the empty streets I freeze in horror to the sound of the air raid alarm I start to sprint bombs exploding all around me sending shrapnel flying towards me, I see a man running infront of me I watch as the man explodes hurtling a multiple limbs towards me. I'm almost home when I feel a sharp pain in my leg "AARRRGH" I look down to see my leg gone, I carry on crawling leaving a bloody trail behind, I'm almost at the gate when a bomb lands right infront of me blowing me up towards the bomb shelter in my backyard but I'm dead.
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ReplyDeleteEven the once friendly lights that lined the moonlit street started to lose, turning into small flickers of the enemy. The nameless terrible thing that sent parents cursing , sent men bravery to disappear in those loud green trucks. And more importantly sent children away no one knows where. That’s when sirens began to scream warnings to run, to hide, and to pray for your souls. I think never got more calls than in these brief moments. I pulled the little ones closer automatically like my arms were filled with concrete, unmoving. I often thought of sending them away to where though? If our beloved capital was like this, how was the rest of the world? That was when the sky turned red, bombs the mutant spawn of the enemy rained, the little ones cried taking comfort in their tears I pulled them closer as the screeching demon found it’s target of us.
Wow. Your story is really good! I feel like Im actually there!! Its very descriptive and awesome!!
DeleteThat's awesome I like how descriptive it is
Deletethat is an awesome story corrie!! it's very descriptive and imaginative! :)
DeleteAn alarm comes from the east from a pole with what looks like giant megaphones. Then out in the distance black dots fill the sky and I hear the rumble of engines. The screeching and wailing of the alarms is so intense and everyone around me starts scream and run around in panic. Then a few seconds or minutes later the bombs drop and I fell my face get burned up in a field of fire.
ReplyDeleteCity of ember.
ReplyDeleteI open my sleepy eyes and peel off my quilt, my breathing is heavy for some odd reason, my lungs are dying for air. I stumble down stairs too see mum screaming at Piper my little sister "EAT YOUR LUNCH!" "no" "EAT IT NOW!" "no" "EAT IT OR DIEEEEEEE!" I scream just to shut her up. "No need to yell now Devyn" mum says while calmly walking to the kitchen. I turn on the radio while eating some chips and hear the commentator wail "everybody, report to the tunnels, bring your essentials and valuables such as clothes, blankets,pillows,teddies,family and lights LOTS of lights and power sources!" I turn to mum "I heard" she says "heard what" piper says with a mouthful of pikelets. We arrive at the tunnels and we are the first to be let in, people are shouting "no not ember this can't be right" but sadly it is right. We are lead to a house and shoved through the door "here is your new home" someone says and the door slams behind us. I guess there was an air pollution of some kind, this is our new life, in the city of ember......
I like your idea of the army themed routine of evacuation!
DeleteGreat story it is extremely wonderous devyn
Deletegreat adjectives :)
Cool story devyn i liked the EAT IT OR DIEEEEEE really funny
DeleteI really like this because you have used lots of detail.
ReplyDeletegood job
Deletefroom tyler
The sirens wailed as heavily armed survivors raced around into defensive positions. Already claymores where detonating in the forts surrounding fields, flinging severed rotting limbs al over our defenses. This dreadful noise was the most feared of all at the survivor fort. These zombie survival barracks had been standing for about four months now. Only scavenger mobs lurked around the edges of the fields, but now the horde was here. We rigged the fields with claymores and spiked pits, but now the explosives were dying down and the pits filling with wailing corpses clinging to life by a thread as they drew their last breaths. The infected sprinting towards the fort savage faces streaked with dark red blood. As they reached the huge concrete walls the corpses repeatedly slammed their heads into the concrete and the bodies started piling up. Now the infected scrambled over the defenses and started ripping apart my friends. Now I’m running. The hallway is getting progressively darker, damper, colder. My feet pelt against the stone floor, my vision streaked with bloody liquid. Then I saw them curled up at the end of the tunnel. The yellow eyes light up. They leap when they figure out who I am. You know what happens now... :)
ReplyDeletePeeta and Haymitch are standing face to face 6 m away from each other. Haymitch is holding a gun at Peeta's head. Peeta is aiming a arrow at Haymitch's chest. Haymitch pulls the trigger, Peeta lets go of the arrow, they both kill each ... at the same time. Katniss is emotionless, Prim is crying and Johanna says " Well that's two less people to kill." Suddenly there is a sound of gunfire, peacekeepers come crashing through the door. One peacekeeper who looks like the leader aims his gun at President Coin and shoots her. Gale, Prim and Katniss get rushed out of the chaos by by Boggs. As they get to the outide of district 13, capitol planes fly overhead and begin to drop explosives over 13. The whole district explode ... everyone is dead. President Snow climbs out of one of the planes with a gun, he kills Boggs. Katniss and Gale duck for cover but Prim isn't fast enough ... she dies. Katniss's mother creeps out of the forest behind President Snow with another gun, she takes aim, pulls the trigger BANG!!!! President Snow is dead
ReplyDeleteawesome story funny random ending
Deletesirens from all directions, people scattering around.screaming, crying, and crashing cars, theres a big intense hot flaming wall of fire driving at the city. I sit in complete darkness waiting and hoping for the out of control chaos to stop from outside my protective layer of metal and dirt.food and supplies fill the huge metal dome. i hear bomb whistles, gun shots, and explosions, lots of explosions. there are wounded all around, bloddy clothes, crying, sighs of relief fill the underground bomb shelter. as the food runs low the people get hungrier. little kids are dying because of the greed of thier parents. i volouteer to go outside to find ammo and guns but the captain says only if you get food aswell i state my name and age ( Gavin Snyman age 17), i twist the rusty sqeaky wheel just to reveal a complete bombsight, there is a gun lying about 5 paces away from me. from what it looks like it's a thompson semi auto machine gun. i take my chances and jump towards gun but i hear a blood curdling sound, a unhuman sound like a dinosaur? i shout at the captain to let me in but he just sends out about 15 men to help me find supplies. as we head toward the food store. the sound of the monster repeats except this time it's closer......we find enough guns and ammo to fill the whole group. i have a sniper rifle and the thompson equiped in my hands the rest have some uzis, pistols, and some other machine guns, my belt is filled 5 frag grenades, c4, flashbang, and some claymores. 1 soldier is acting very weird we caught him 1 night trying to eat the kids that died from starvation. we think he is a cannibul his name is diego. we find a big cliffside and we deside to climb the cliffside to have a better view of the city. one troop goes off to find some rope or some vine thing.
ReplyDeletei think they would build a under ground city to stop pollution
ReplyDeleteCity of Ember
ReplyDeleteI awake, slowly sitting up I notice that Jacqui is sleeping beside me curled up in a ball. I start wondering what happened last night at the party celebration, then it hits me, the smell of smoke is everywhere and there is a light, a huge light bigger then the others I have seen. A FIRE! The house is on fire! I start trying to wawke Jacqui but it doesnt work, I keep trying to wake her but the fire is still blazing. I keep trying, but then I notice that she wasn't asleep, because her arm is on me. She was knocked out, probably when trying to wake me. Instead of trying to wake her again, I carry her out and finally the alarms goes off and is saying for us to evacuate to the center of town. And there someone will come and get us. When we get there, an old lady is waiting for us, lets us into her house. This is our new life in the City of Ember...
i wake up to the smell of the fields and my mother hovering over me looking a little worried "whats wrong mother" i ask "their coming now, first through the city then to the country" she replies i notice my father and elder brother waiting anxiously by the door "how do you know they are coming mother?" i ask curiously "because father was in town when the sirens blared" she says "we must hurry befo-"whooop whoop-wooop the deafening sirens cut of my mothers words "hurry jane NOW! we must leave!" she screams over the sirens.as we race outside i see the planes over head starting to drop their bombs on the fields around our house we start sprinting as the noise of the bombs gets closer then i look around and see a bomb hit our house we were atleast 30-40 metres away but bomb sends us flying fowards.....
ReplyDeletecool story georg it's very awesome i like all of it.
DeleteAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaagh the zombies are coming crunch i grimace as my shot rpg rocket connects with the head of a maggot infested zombie, splattering brains and face all over me and my troops-a particularly rotten eyeball splattering me in the face a massive clound of the zombies are running at us at an eyeboggling speed rrrrrrrrrip my machine gun sprays lead all over them bringing down a few but theres too many aaaaaagh a zombie tears my arm of and digs its fingers into my eye sockets another sombie then grabs my lower jaw and tears it straight of i cant even scream as i die
ReplyDeleteOnce the city of Ember was a clean, green, beautiful place the sun was always shining and it was never cloudy. But one day, a long long time ago the clouds started rolling inn. There was a wave a of fear over the city. Everyone knew there was something wrong. It grew darker, the ground started to shake, there was a loud rumble.
ReplyDeleteThere I was, just standing there just a few metres away from the one I loved. Peeta Mallark had once been the love of my life, but now, evil Snow has turned him against me. I was heartbroken, but not as heartbroken as I am now. He was about 5 meters away from me and holding a shotgun, the worst part was, it was aiming at me. I tried to convince him that we were in love once, but he won't beleive a word I say. 2 minutes later, BANG!! He shoots the bullet out of the gun straight at me, and killed me.
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